Welcome to the concise-writing game, Tighten This! Here’s Challenge Sentence 6, inspired by Marshall Ennis:
This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.
Your revision: _______________________ [Scroll to the bottom and put your revision in a comment. To be considered for galaxy-wide glory, respond by Friday, July 10.]
Tips:
Psst: If you’re on Twitter, please click this tweet to share the joy of writing (and the joy of Word Up!) with fellow word lovers:
Writers—yes, you—got your copy of @MarciaRJohnston's 'Word Up!' yet? #writing #editing Click To TweetLast Week’s Challenge Sentence
In case you’re playing this game for the first time (welcome!), or in case you’ve had other things on your mind since you read last week’s Challenge Sentence, here it is again:
All original executed contracts and change orders are to be forwarded to the designated person in each office for filing in a central location.
Ray’s Pick
(Ray speaking) I looked for something like this: Send original completed contracts and change orders to your file clerk [for file clerk, substitute the title of the person in your office who does this]. This assumes that all the people who do this in all the offices have the same title, which might not be the case.
Karen Mulholland wins with this revision (29% fewer words):
Send all original executed contracts and change orders to the person who handles them for your office.
Marcia’s Pick
(Marcia speaking) Thanks to all to participated last week, as always. Playing is the point. Since I have to pick a winner, Keith Kmett gets the nod. Here’s his revision, which, in my view, captures every essential element (reducing word count by 46%):
Send all original executed contracts and change orders to designated persons for filing.
How did I arrive at this translation formula? See “Write Tight(er): Get to the Point and Save Millions.”
Video
Don’t see my video below? See it on YouTube.
Sign Up!
Want to play Tighten This! every week? Want a shot of fun while building your concise-writing skills with word-loving friends? Want to edify your inner editor? Subscribe to my blog under the heading “Sign Up!” (above right or, on a mobile device, all the way at the bottom). Then, each time I publish a post, you’ll receive an email.
Again, Challenge Sentence 6
This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.
Your revision: _______________________ [Scroll to the bottom and put your revision in a comment by Friday, July 10.]
Go!
Approach this often difficult problem with creativity.
Please address this difficult problem creatively.
Be kind…first time 🙂
Thanks, Leigh. You were quick!
This problem is difficult. Be creative!
Creatively solve this problem, please.
Approach this difficult problem with creativity.
Please solve this problem, creatively.
Approach this problem with creativity.
Thanks, Kamala.
Creativity overcomes difficult problems.
Be creative problem solvers!
Use creativity to solve this problem.
or
Solve this problem creatively.
Please, approach this difficult task creatively!
Thanks for playing, Marjorie.
Thanks, Daniel.
Thanks, Mary.
Thanks for playing, Tanya.
Thanks, Karen.
Thanks for playing, Steve.
Thanks, Sandra.
Thanks, Ann.
Thanks for playing, Susan.
Approach this problem creativity.
Thanks for playing, Margaret.
To solve this one, think outside the box.
Much as I disdain the use of cliches, in this case I think it adds some color that “be creative” lacks. And if we can’t tighten colorfully, what’s the use of playing?
I like this answer!
🙂
Thanks for the color, Larry.
This problem can be difficult. Think creatively!
We encourage creative approach to this difficult problem.
Do approach the difficult problem creatively
Original: This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.
My revision: With this difficult problem, try the creative approach.
This problem calls for creativity.
Approach this difficult problem with creativity.
Difficult problem approach creatively.
Approach this difficult problem creatively.
Ingenuity necessary to solve problem.
No ingenuity, problem unsolvable.
Although this problem can be considered difficublt, you’re encouraged to solve it using creativity.
Now if we could only do something about auto-correct!
Amended:
Although this problem may be considered difficult, you’re encouraged to solve it using creativity.
Be creative in solving this problem. It may be difficult.
Try resolving this creatively, jerkwad.
Thanks, Thelma.
Thanks, Shanker.
Thanks for playing, Reshma.
Thanks, Anthony.
Thank you, Marty.
Thanks, Karen.
Thanks for all the suggestions, Anthony.
Thanks, Lisa. I like the original spelling.
Thanks, Yusuf.
Approach this problem with creativity.
This problem can be difficult; be creative.
Approach with creativity for less difficult problem ahead.
Here are my 2 options:
– Approach difficult problems with creativity.
– Be creative when approaching difficult problems.
Thanks, Lara.
Thanks for playing, Donna.
Hi, Joe. Thanks for your contribution.
Double thanks, Celine.
Creativity solves all problems
Thanks for playing, Alasdair.
Use your imagination to solve this problem.
I have two options:
When challenge gets hard, crack it using cheerful creativity!
OR
When challenge gets hard, creativity gets it going!
Thanks for playing, Sushruti.
Thanks, Inma.
This is a tough one. If you get stumped, pitch the wildest idea you can come up with.
Thanks for your creativity, Laurel.
Pingback: Tighten This! Challenge Sentence 7 [game] - Writing.RocksWriting.Rocks