Tighten This! Challenge Sentence 6 [game]

Posted on July 6, 2015 by Marcia Riefer Johnston

Last modified: April 19, 2020

Welcome to the concise-writing game, Tighten This! Here’s Challenge Sentence 6, inspired by Marshall Ennis:

This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.

Your revision: _______________________ [Scroll to the bottom and put your revision in a comment. To be considered for galaxy-wide glory, respond by Friday, July 10.]

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Last Week’s Challenge Sentence

In case you’re playing this game for the first time (welcome!), or in case you’ve had other things on your mind since you read last week’s Challenge Sentence, here it is again:

All original executed contracts and change orders are to be forwarded to the designated person in each office for filing in a central location.

Ray’s Pick

(Ray speaking) I looked for something like this: Send original completed contracts and change orders to your file clerk [for file clerk, substitute the title of the person in your office who does this]. This assumes that all the people who do this in all the offices have the same title, which might not be the case.

Karen Mulholland wins with this revision (29% fewer words):

Send all original executed contracts and change orders to the person who handles them for your office.

Marcia’s Pick

(Marcia speaking) Thanks to all to participated last week, as always. Playing is the point. Since I have to pick a winner, Keith Kmett gets the nod. Here’s his revision, which, in my view, captures every essential element (reducing word count by 46%):

Send all original executed contracts and change orders to designated persons for filing.

How did I arrive at this translation formula? See “Write Tight(er): Get to the Point and Save Millions.”

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Again, Challenge Sentence 6

This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.

Your revision: _______________________ [Scroll to the bottom and put your revision in a comment by Friday, July 10.]

Go!

Index of Challenge Sentences

69 thoughts on “Tighten This! Challenge Sentence 6 [game]”

Leigh on July 6, 2015 at 12:43 pm said:

Approach this often difficult problem with creativity.
Kamala on July 6, 2015 at 12:45 pm said:

Please address this difficult problem creatively.
Approach this problem creativity. on July 6, 2015 at 12:45 pm said:

Be kind…first time 🙂
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 12:47 pm said:

Thanks, Leigh. You were quick!
Marjorie on July 6, 2015 at 12:48 pm said:

This problem is difficult. Be creative!
Daniel Lemke on July 6, 2015 at 12:49 pm said:

Creatively solve this problem, please.
Mary Fitzgerald on July 6, 2015 at 12:51 pm said:

Approach this difficult problem with creativity.
Tanya on July 6, 2015 at 12:52 pm said:

Please solve this problem, creatively.
Karen P. on July 6, 2015 at 12:52 pm said:

Approach this problem with creativity.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 12:53 pm said:

Thanks, Kamala.
Steve Hall on July 6, 2015 at 12:55 pm said:

Creativity overcomes difficult problems.
Sandra on July 6, 2015 at 12:55 pm said:

Be creative problem solvers!
Ann on July 6, 2015 at 12:56 pm said:

Use creativity to solve this problem.
or
Solve this problem creatively.
Susan Kelley on July 6, 2015 at 12:56 pm said:

Please, approach this difficult task creatively!
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:04 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Marjorie.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:05 pm said:

Thanks, Daniel.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:05 pm said:

Thanks, Mary.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:05 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Tanya.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:06 pm said:

Thanks, Karen.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:07 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Steve.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:07 pm said:

Thanks, Sandra.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:07 pm said:

Thanks, Ann.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:07 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Susan.
Mugs on July 6, 2015 at 1:18 pm said:

Approach this problem creativity.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 1:24 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Margaret.
Larry Kunz on July 6, 2015 at 1:24 pm said:

To solve this one, think outside the box.

Much as I disdain the use of cliches, in this case I think it adds some color that “be creative” lacks. And if we can’t tighten colorfully, what’s the use of playing?
Ann on July 6, 2015 at 2:21 pm said:

I like this answer!
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 2:29 pm said:

🙂
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 6, 2015 at 2:30 pm said:

Thanks for the color, Larry.
Thelma Valdez on July 6, 2015 at 4:57 pm said:

This problem can be difficult. Think creatively!
Shanker on July 6, 2015 at 9:49 pm said:

We encourage creative approach to this difficult problem.
Reshma on July 7, 2015 at 2:23 am said:

Do approach the difficult problem creatively
Marty on July 7, 2015 at 8:14 am said:

Original: This problem can be difficult; you’re encouraged to approach it with creativity.

My revision: With this difficult problem, try the creative approach.
Karen Mulholland on July 7, 2015 at 11:30 am said:

This problem calls for creativity.
anthony deloach on July 7, 2015 at 12:52 pm said:

Approach this difficult problem with creativity.
anthony deloach on July 7, 2015 at 12:59 pm said:

Difficult problem approach creatively.
anthony deloach on July 7, 2015 at 2:48 pm said:

Approach this difficult problem creatively.
anthony deloach on July 7, 2015 at 2:56 pm said:

Ingenuity necessary to solve problem.
anthony deloach on July 7, 2015 at 3:00 pm said:

No ingenuity, problem unsolvable.
Lisa Trager on July 8, 2015 at 5:45 am said:

Although this problem can be considered difficublt, you’re encouraged to solve it using creativity.
Lisa Trager on July 8, 2015 at 5:50 am said:

Now if we could only do something about auto-correct!

Amended:

Although this problem may be considered difficult, you’re encouraged to solve it using creativity.
Yusuf on July 8, 2015 at 9:08 am said:

Be creative in solving this problem. It may be difficult.
John Wayne on July 8, 2015 at 4:31 pm said:

Try resolving this creatively, jerkwad.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:37 pm said:

Thanks, Thelma.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:37 pm said:

Thanks, Shanker.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:38 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Reshma.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:38 pm said:

Thanks, Anthony.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:38 pm said:

Thank you, Marty.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:38 pm said:

Thanks, Karen.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:39 pm said:

Thanks for all the suggestions, Anthony.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:40 pm said:

Thanks, Lisa. I like the original spelling.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 8, 2015 at 4:40 pm said:

Thanks, Yusuf.
Lara Horne on July 9, 2015 at 2:13 am said:

Approach this problem with creativity.
Donna on July 9, 2015 at 7:17 am said:

This problem can be difficult; be creative.
Joe Tierney on July 9, 2015 at 10:32 am said:

Approach with creativity for less difficult problem ahead.
Celine on July 9, 2015 at 12:14 pm said:

Here are my 2 options:

– Approach difficult problems with creativity.

– Be creative when approaching difficult problems.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 9, 2015 at 12:15 pm said:

Thanks, Lara.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 9, 2015 at 12:15 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Donna.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 9, 2015 at 12:16 pm said:

Hi, Joe. Thanks for your contribution.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 9, 2015 at 12:16 pm said:

Double thanks, Celine.
Alasdair on July 9, 2015 at 1:50 pm said:

Creativity solves all problems
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 9, 2015 at 1:52 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Alasdair.
Inma on July 10, 2015 at 9:07 am said:

Use your imagination to solve this problem.
Sushruti on July 10, 2015 at 2:47 pm said:

I have two options:

When challenge gets hard, crack it using cheerful creativity!
OR
When challenge gets hard, creativity gets it going!
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 10, 2015 at 2:52 pm said:

Thanks for playing, Sushruti.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 10, 2015 at 2:53 pm said:

Thanks, Inma.
Laurel Beason on July 10, 2015 at 3:17 pm said:

This is a tough one. If you get stumped, pitch the wildest idea you can come up with.
Marcia Riefer Johnston on July 10, 2015 at 4:38 pm said:

Thanks for your creativity, Laurel.
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